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Treasa's avatar

I love how you give the breath a voice in your poem, one that has a story to tell, a story I never knew of. Thanks .

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Daniel Henderson's avatar

This was really cool. The poem went in a direction I didn't expect in each stanza. The first stanza is cozy and familiar. In the second stanza, the speaker plays around with the thought with colorful imagery until they get more serious in the last stanza. Beautiful and seamless transition. Nice narrative through line. The poem dances well with the playful, philosophical, and presupposition. Bonus points because I did get goosebumps thinking about how lonely someone's last breath must feel. Now that's poetry!

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