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Treasa's avatar

I love how you give the breath a voice in your poem, one that has a story to tell, a story I never knew of. Thanks .

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Treasa. I feel like I owe this poem to my son. I'm not an especially curious person, but he is curious about everything and is always sharing facts with us.

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Daniel Henderson's avatar

This was really cool. The poem went in a direction I didn't expect in each stanza. The first stanza is cozy and familiar. In the second stanza, the speaker plays around with the thought with colorful imagery until they get more serious in the last stanza. Beautiful and seamless transition. Nice narrative through line. The poem dances well with the playful, philosophical, and presupposition. Bonus points because I did get goosebumps thinking about how lonely someone's last breath must feel. Now that's poetry!

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Your goosebumps honor me, Daniel! 😊

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Kay M.'s avatar

My pleasure M!

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Kay M.'s avatar

Beautiful. "desperate for one more flash

of incandescent thought."

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Kay! 💛

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Mike Speriosu's avatar

Beautiful, Margaret!

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you, Mike!

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R. Rangan PhD's avatar

Fascinating stuff! thanks for sharing!

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Margaret Ann Silver's avatar

Thank you for reading it! (and for the restack--it's always an honor).

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