This was really cool. I think you nailed this prompt! Each 'yesterday' feels like it's own vignette that tells a story from different times throughout the speaker's life and they all flow together so well. My favorite was especially:
"Yesterday a piece of meteorite fell out of the sky, a blue wheel blazing past our backyard, where I sat with the cordless phone pressed to my cheek."
So mystical and well written! The imagery and description lit my imagination on fire. Well done.
Thank you, Daniel! I started with a lot more “yesterdays” and then revised a lot. This form was so fun to work with because I didn’t feel pressure (from myself) to make it make sense.
Now I'm wondering if I got the word meteorite wrong (?). It was when I was in eighth grade and pretty late at night. I looked it up in the newspaper (back then) and there was a short article about it. It was beautiful, and super close (like what I imagine a shooting star looks like if you're only a few feet away from it). But I feel like there might be a different name for it?!?
Thank you, Kym! It's really the NaPoWriMo challenge that is getting me there. I love it! You should come join us--it's a fun group posting on Tara Connor's daily Note (Tara writes Poetical if you want to search for her Substack). She posts the challenge from the website and people post what they came up with.
It'll be interesting to read everyone's take! I'll take a look! Last night before falling asleep I wrote a poem inspired by this structure and by Mike with the years about the timeline of my husband and I! It was so fun!
So cool! I really enjoy the way you describe that mango and its effects. I also appreciate your vulnerability about shoplifting.
Didn't know this sense of the word 'anaphora'! In the linguistics world, it means words/phrases that refer to something else in the text, such as pronouns but also stuff like "the man" (once he's already been introduced in the text).
Thank you, Mike! I haven't written an anaphora before. It may be that I oversimplified the directions in order to understand it a little better. Off to read your anaphora :).
Thanks, Mom! I responded to Rachael up above. It definitely happened, but I'm wondering if the phenomenon that I saw has a different name than meteorite?!
This was really cool. I think you nailed this prompt! Each 'yesterday' feels like it's own vignette that tells a story from different times throughout the speaker's life and they all flow together so well. My favorite was especially:
"Yesterday a piece of meteorite fell out of the sky, a blue wheel blazing past our backyard, where I sat with the cordless phone pressed to my cheek."
So mystical and well written! The imagery and description lit my imagination on fire. Well done.
Thank you, Daniel! I started with a lot more “yesterdays” and then revised a lot. This form was so fun to work with because I didn’t feel pressure (from myself) to make it make sense.
Mixed up memories. Perfect.
I'm super curious about the meteorite!
Now I'm wondering if I got the word meteorite wrong (?). It was when I was in eighth grade and pretty late at night. I looked it up in the newspaper (back then) and there was a short article about it. It was beautiful, and super close (like what I imagine a shooting star looks like if you're only a few feet away from it). But I feel like there might be a different name for it?!?
I love learning about these different types of poems and structures through your poems! So interesting!
Thank you, Kym! It's really the NaPoWriMo challenge that is getting me there. I love it! You should come join us--it's a fun group posting on Tara Connor's daily Note (Tara writes Poetical if you want to search for her Substack). She posts the challenge from the website and people post what they came up with.
It'll be interesting to read everyone's take! I'll take a look! Last night before falling asleep I wrote a poem inspired by this structure and by Mike with the years about the timeline of my husband and I! It was so fun!
Awesome! I'd love to see it if you want to share it :).
I'll share it in my next Substack post I think! It just needs some tweaking 👌🏻
Yay! 😊
Amazing, Margaret Ann. Light shining on just these tiles in the mosaic of a life.
Thank you. Your summaries of poems are always like little poems themselves.
So I finally got that "one-line poem" thing right, from a few prompts ago ... ! 💛🌿
😁 😊
So cool! I really enjoy the way you describe that mango and its effects. I also appreciate your vulnerability about shoplifting.
Didn't know this sense of the word 'anaphora'! In the linguistics world, it means words/phrases that refer to something else in the text, such as pronouns but also stuff like "the man" (once he's already been introduced in the text).
You might like this one I wrote, which is somewhat similar: https://mikesperiosu.substack.com/p/right-now
Thank you, Mike! I haven't written an anaphora before. It may be that I oversimplified the directions in order to understand it a little better. Off to read your anaphora :).
Whatever it is, it sounds fascinating
Now you've got me thinking about my own Yesterdays. And also the Beatle's song is starting up in the recesses of my mind.
:) I had "Tomorrow" from "Annie" in my head by the last lines, so I had to take a few words out.
Love the events and like Rachael, curious about the meteorite....or was that a fantasy upon seeing the blue wheel rolling?
Thanks, Mom! I responded to Rachael up above. It definitely happened, but I'm wondering if the phenomenon that I saw has a different name than meteorite?!